Another pair of eyes helps too!
Thatís where Pimp My Pitch comes in.
Each week, I will choose one 3-line pitch from the submissions and offer revision and tweaking advice. Iíll be on the lookout for passive language, sentences that could use more conflict, action or detail as well as giving praise for what is working!
Submit* your 3-line or 1-paragraph pitch for a chance to get some feedback
Submit your pitch to: firstname.lastname@example.org
As you start writing your pitch, here are a couple of hints to get you moving on the right direction.
Stick to your main character and the main story
Itís really easy to become side tracked and try to jam all your characters, their motivations and subplots into your pitch, but all that does is confuse the person you are pitching. Keep the pitch to your main character (MC), their obstacles, and stakes. Only include other characters if it drives the MCís story forward.
- Pride and Prejudice -equals- Elizabeth Bennett & Mr. Darcy
- Pride and Prejudice -does not equal- Mrs. Bennett, Mr. Collins, Jane
- Wizard of Oz -equals- Dorothy & The Wizard
- Wizard of Oz-does not equal-Auntie Em, The Scarecrow, The Tin Man
Get specific with your details. Vagueness in pitches can make your unique book sound like every single other title on the shelf. What will set your pitch apart are the specific details that you include about your story. Dig deep into your story and reveal the character, story, and plot elements that bring your story to life during a pitch.
- Superpowers = psychic abilities, control of fire, water breather
- Danger = target of a murderer, exposed spy, secret about to be revealed
- Sexy = disarming wit, lopsided smile, soft hands
- Job = banker, teacher, writer
- School = grade school, high school, community college
*If you submit your pitch, you accept and give Savvy Authors and JoJo Jensen full permission to use and publish your pitch in all media.